Once upon a time, I was sitting on my kitchen table eating a sandwich and playing on my phone. But then the battery died and then BOOM! I hurried downstairs to see Jeff sitting right where the white fridge was knocked over. "Jeff, what was that big boom?" I said. "I accidentally knocked your fridge down. I was energetic." "Jeff!!" I had to have somebody help me get the fridge back up. But then an alien came over and then I said, "Why are you here?" "I'm here to take over the world!!! Ha Ha Ha Ha!"
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Amelia 100 WC
12/5/2017 09:47:15 am
This is really great. The part where the fridge gets knocked over is especially funny. Your punctuation and sentence structure is great !
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Kami
12/7/2017 10:53:45 am
I really like this it's kinda funny good job on making it it is really cool
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Hunter W.
12/7/2017 11:02:42 am
That was really funny, but you made it sound really cool!
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KeyKey
12/7/2017 11:10:16 am
Hi Luke I like how you told your good story it was a good one I hope you make more and good punctuation and your awesome personality.
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gabe
12/8/2017 11:10:20 am
very funny, i get it
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